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Re: My Poems
« Reply #30 on: October 08, 2007, 03:31:02 pm »
Im listening to 2PAC, Eazy-E, Ice Cube etc. And from Poland im only listening to beginning crews from my city. Begin of polish rap in poland is in about 1991 and hip hop about 1992-1993. Now im listening to underground hip hop from my city B) -8 niebo(8 sky in english :P ).

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #31 on: October 08, 2007, 07:31:52 pm »
Im listening to 2PAC, Eazy-E, Ice Cube etc. And from Poland im only listening to beginning crews from my city. Begin of polish rap in poland is in about 1991 and hip hop about 1992-1993. Now im listening to underground hip hop from my city B) -8 niebo(8 sky in english :P ).

I listen to almost evrything, Post evrything here would take to much long time so evrything between Barry White and Judas Priest are my music styles. Almost evrything execpt pop and thechno.

Anyway arn't we getting a little bit offtopic here?

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #32 on: October 09, 2007, 07:48:56 am »
Yes, we're getting offtopic... I want Golden's poems!

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #33 on: October 10, 2007, 10:13:18 pm »
I wanted a wife.
But she had a Knife.
And tooked my Life.


I've forgott about that class ninjashark.
Three sentence's with a rhyme on each one.
a
a
a

They can continue with a way more rhymes. But keep in mind that all should rhyme and having short sentence's.





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Re: My Poems
« Reply #34 on: October 28, 2007, 08:38:35 pm »
*Bumping*

For a MMORPG that I am playing...
The goblins will expire today
The Undead starts to pray
Humans will very soon pay
In the end, Elves will stay
And so will it be, Day after day
[/i]

Ten minutes entry

It's time to use the armor of leather.
Going in for battles, and destruction.
So it's time to raise the Feather.
Only cause someone wants some action.



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Re: My Poems
« Reply #35 on: November 11, 2007, 12:26:44 pm »

Kill Bill
By ninjashark

There is a person that I want to kill.
His name is Bill.
He got Microsoft and some shits,
selling Windows Vista to stupid kids.

That motherfu**er
made my PC suffer
from his stupid updates,
made by Bill Gates.

But that suffer wasn't forever
kuz I was so clever
I formated the first partition
and that ended his stupid competition

Now my PC is with Windows XP
that came from an illigal CD
and now I know 1 thing - never install updates
made by the fu**ing Bill Gates

« Last Edit: November 11, 2007, 12:32:05 pm by ninjashark »

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #36 on: November 11, 2007, 01:06:55 pm »
It's great ninjashark, It has the thing that a real poem shall have... Feeling. It sounds like you really belives what you wrote and that thoose words comes from your heart, that it was making a poem good.
No need to have all rhymes right then.

This night, I was dreaming this...

Your Blonde Hair is Swingin in the Air.
What I've Feel is true, They are Real.
This isn't Fair, We should be a Pair.
So please Peel off your wall of steel.

You can't hide, Please come to my side.
It is near, I whisper in your ear.
It is Wide, but please leave your Pride.
You can't Fear, be strong as the Bear.

So take me, I will always be yours.
[/u]

I think that is the first time in my life, that I dream at english, I don't know why.
But today when I wooked up, and looked at the paper that I wroted during the night, I saw, how advanced the rymes was. And techinaly it's the best poem I ever wrote.

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #37 on: November 11, 2007, 01:13:02 pm »
It's great ninjashark, It has the thing that a real poem shall have... Feeling. It sounds like you really belives what you wrote and that thoose words comes from your heart, that it was making a poem good.
No need to have all rhymes right then.

Thx, I that really comes from my heart kuz the things in my last poem really happend to me. I mean to my PC.
Yeah, that's an important thing, ya know, but you didn't taught me about it when I asked you to learn me some poetry. The good new is that I discoverd that thing my self

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #38 on: November 11, 2007, 07:03:25 pm »
but you didn't taught me about it when I asked you to learn me some poetry.

Some things, can't be learned by an teacher, it must come from the student itself, Feeling in poems is one of thoose things. Writing a poem is easy, share your feelings with an Poem is hard. Writing an perfect poem is very hard, cause then you must have the feeling, the readers must feel the same feel as you when reading, and it should also follow any kind of the poem rules.

Discovering it yourself is a neccesary thing to do, Follow the rules are the basics, they must be learned in the begginning, and when the feelings arrive, it's possible to analyse them deep. They mean something then, it's just great.

I would say that it's the difference between an "Advanced Rhyme / Verse or an "true Poem / Poetry"
A Rhyme is easy to do.
It's harder to share the feelings with you.

I think you got it, But still practise on the rules, cause if you ever write many poems in the future, you will need to follow the rules, especially rhyming, cause of some reason people has easier to remember a poem that rhymes, than one that dosn't. Also it looks more proffesional if you do.

But remember to keep the Feel

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #39 on: November 11, 2007, 07:27:51 pm »
FAGS


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #40 on: November 12, 2007, 04:37:11 pm »
You are just to young to Understand BrophY.

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #41 on: November 12, 2007, 06:32:09 pm »
at 21 im old enough to understand that this is gay


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #42 on: November 12, 2007, 07:22:14 pm »
You just don't have the same cultural experience as me...
No offense but mostly persons that claims down on people that write poems, are just not smart enough to understand them...

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #43 on: November 13, 2007, 04:03:45 pm »
gay

thats from everyone in irc (including vrocker :o)


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #44 on: November 13, 2007, 08:49:31 pm »
You shouldn't call me gay!
One day I gonna make you Pay!
If you then will be in my way!


You can't see
But I don't blame you for that
you are just a guy that know how to eat and pee
You arn't more than a rat



 

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