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Re: My Poems
« Reply #15 on: September 30, 2007, 04:21:44 pm »
Really??? I must learn poetry!

I can help you with that.


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #16 on: September 30, 2007, 04:33:34 pm »
Poems eh...

FAG

Hey whats wrong with poetry?

The girls love it :P

Girls love alot a things


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #17 on: September 30, 2007, 06:31:25 pm »
Really??? I must learn poetry!

I can help you with that.



REALLY ?? REALLY?? REALLY?? Let's go man!

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #18 on: September 30, 2007, 08:40:32 pm »
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REALLY ?? REALLY?? REALLY?? Let's go man!

First of all you will need to learn some rules. I know they are booring.

My favourite is the Free Verse Another know as; ABAB
Basicly the last word on each sentence should rhyme through the mall ABAB
Example:
Fernando Alonso always buy cars in pair {A}
Because his car is always off the way.  {B}
Evrytime he crash, he cries in his lair. {A}
And being ther for the rest of the day. {B}

Another version of the Free verse is the AABB, It's pretty common in rap and such.
Exapmle:
Don't wait to beat the street {A}
Stay in school and keep your seat {A}
The entire eight parts of speech {B}
Will your reading, writing, and speaking teach! {B}

An advanced version of the Free Verse is the Limericks. It is based on five lines. AABBA
Example:
A flea and a fly in a flue (A)
Were caught, so what could they do? (A)
Said the fly, "Let us flee." (B)
"Let us fly," said the flea. (B)
So they flew through a flaw in the flue. (A)


Lets go to harder ones ;D
The Acrostic.
The rules are simple, Evry sentence should be on a line itself. Evry first letter in evry line should be a word when reading from top to bottom. And the word should connect with the poem itself.
Example:
Vanilla
As I eat it on my brownie
Not doubting it's sweet
Ice cream is a tasty treat
Lots of lingering taste
Lasting to the end
Always my favorite!


Now it's time for some japaneese rhymes.
Haiku, Usually connects to the nature in the subject of the poem, but there is no need for it. All Haiku have three lines. With a fixed number of syllables
Line 1= 5 syllables
Line 2= 7 syllables
Line 3= 5 syllables
Example:
The dying plant bends (5)
And drips its dew to the ground (7)
It falls like a tear (5)

Tanka - The second from japan that I know. Like the Haiku is use Syllables. Harder than the Haiku, and a more advanced poem.
Line 1= 5 syllables
Line 2= 7 syllables
Line 3= 5 syllables
Line 4= 7 syllables, rhymes with line 5
Line 5= 7 syllables, rhymes with line 4
Example:
I have my own place (5)
Where I can go for hours (7)
I go there to write (5)
It is not difficult to find (7) {A}
Search within your heart and mind. (7) {A}

One that I never really had been good at ;)
Cinquain - Based on five lines.
Line 1:Title - 2 syllables
Line 2: Description- 4 syllables
Line 3: Action- 6 syllables
Line 4: Feeling - 8 syllables
Line 5: Synonym for the title - 2 syllables
Example:
Flowers (2)
Pretty, fragrant (4)
Waiting, watching, weeding (6)
Enjoying all the while they grow (8)
Gardens (2)


There is also some kind of poems that are based on the shape. Diamonte poems are one of them. They are built by 7 lines. They following the following rules.
Line 1: Noun or subject
Line 2: Two Adjectives
Line 3: Three 'ing' words
Line 4: Four words about the subject
Line 5: Three 'ing words
Line 6: Two adjectives
Line 7: Synonym for the subject
Example:
Home
Safe, caring
Loving, sharing, talking
Friendship, food, car, travels
Living, loving, enjoying
Joyous, adventurous
Family

There are a lot more poems rules out there, But them are the only ones that I remember in my head for the moment. A long read I know :P

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #19 on: September 30, 2007, 09:44:14 pm »
Sorry, in my country was a storm and my 'net connection was pissed out for a while and I'm start reading this right now :(

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #20 on: October 01, 2007, 07:40:18 am »
Thanx, man! I'll practice. Anyway, do you have some expirience with girls? I'm (maybe) the youngest member of this forum and my time to find a GF is now. I'm 14 years old, BTW. My birth was on 2 July 1993 and I had a birthday a 2 months ago.

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #21 on: October 01, 2007, 01:29:24 pm »
Omg, I should of guessed your ages, poems for 'girls', hormones flowing!


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #22 on: October 01, 2007, 04:37:37 pm »
Thanx, man! I'll practice. Anyway, do you have some expirience with girls? I'm (maybe) the youngest member of this forum and my time to find a GF is now. I'm 14 years old, BTW. My birth was on 2 July 1993 and I had a birthday a 2 months ago.

Trust me there could be more....
Anyway I am still at my first girlfriend, Have been togheter for the last three months, Thing are going well for me.
I am 15 so my experience isn't very high with them...


Omg, I should of guessed your ages, poems for 'girls', hormones flowing!
My hormones want to flow.
I know only one of them can win.
They want out and Blow.
And that is a sin.





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Re: My Poems
« Reply #23 on: October 01, 2007, 04:40:54 pm »
YAHAHAHAHAHAHA!  ;D

1 friend of mine had a girl in his dreams when he was 3 years old! That friend is a bulgarian too :P ;)
« Last Edit: October 01, 2007, 04:46:21 pm by ninjashark »

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #24 on: October 01, 2007, 05:08:08 pm »
BrophY is having an orgasm.
But only in his dreams.
This is my way of sarcasm.
And all the girls he touch, screams.


Sorry BrophY, But I just couldn't resist.

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #25 on: October 01, 2007, 05:55:35 pm »
BrophY is having an orgasm.
But only in his dreams.
This is my way of sarcasm.
And all the girls he touch, screams.


Sorry BrophY, But I just couldn't resist.


Mwahahah! Another good "poem"!

By the way here are my first rimes ever:

Tommy and his new gun :P

Tommy Vercetti
in Vice City
kills people for fun
with his new gun


Alonso vs. Schumy

Alonso always lies
"Schumy didn't win the prize!"
He is so envious
and super vicious
high speed disaster
kuz Schumy is a F1 master
« Last Edit: October 01, 2007, 06:34:40 pm by ninjashark »

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #26 on: October 01, 2007, 07:08:12 pm »
I cant wait to see you look back on these poems once you have got past first base rofl


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Re: My Poems
« Reply #27 on: October 01, 2007, 07:24:10 pm »
Ok I am going to analize tyour poem.

Tommy Vercetti
in Vice City
kills people for fun
with his new gun

This poem, Only rhymes at the two last. Fun and gun rhymes.
Cetti and citty dosn't. Anyway good attempt. For being on a first try.

Tommy Vercetti in his town.
Shooting people down.
Just for fun.
With his new gun.

Just changed it so it rhymes by the pattern AABB

Alonso always lies
"Schumy didn't win the prize!"
He is so envious
and super vicious
high speed disaster
kuz Schumy is a F1 master
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Techincally this one is good. A short rap type.

I also forgott to mentioned that all poetry or poems always are written in itallic. I don't really know why, I guess it's a classic thing to do.



Some new ones...
I want to hold you tight honey.
But I ain't got the money.
So you don't get paid.
And I don't get laid.


I want to be your lover.
I want to give you some flowers.
But you always take cover.
Don't be afraid of the love power.


It's night and I sitting in your tree.
Singin that I want to be your.
Claoming that my love to you is Free.
But you keep me outsied the door.




« Last Edit: October 01, 2007, 08:39:48 pm by Golden Gun »

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #28 on: October 04, 2007, 02:26:14 pm »
Nice poems. But really im dont reading poems. Im only making RAP and Hip Hop songs:P

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #29 on: October 07, 2007, 04:42:42 pm »
Nice poems. But really im dont reading poems. Im only making RAP and Hip Hop songs:P

I want to say to you that a normal Rap song is a song based on poetry. Just not an normal rhyme pattern or rythm in the lines, That is in the basics. But the difference is the way the text is showed to the people. Normaly rapper is a cool guy that just want to be though, And a poetry man is an old man or a gay. (No offense to anyone but that is what I'va had notice) I listen to rap, the old rap from the 80s cause I think that the new one, Is having to much, wannabee in it. No feeling, They don't know what they sing and that is something I really get mad at. I don't listen to so very much rap though, Prefer more soft metal, or more rock.

 

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