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My Poems
« on: September 22, 2007, 11:40:41 pm »
Here is some Poems that I've done latly

Money can't buy life
So close your purse
Think about it and enyoy your wife
Or you might end up with a nurse

Started that one with a quote from Bob Marley.


We don't know evrything
Even if we think so
Cause there will alyaws be a lastthing
And then evrybody says no

Just maked that one in a few minutes. It like come with.

We always have hope.
Even if sometimes it's hard to find.
Your legs feels like soap.
But looking for it in your mind.

Honestly the soap dosn't really fit in. I will change it soon.

You continue the fight.
Holding an flame in you hand.
It's flashing like a big Light.
But suddenly it converts to sand.

And you are in the middle of the Night.
So you lose the war and your land.
But still you think you fight for the right.
So your soliders stands together tight.

and waiting for you to lead them to victory.

My longest free verse in english so far.


What do you think? Am I good or do I suck? Please comment!

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #1 on: September 23, 2007, 12:40:21 pm »
niiiiceeee!!!  ;)

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #2 on: September 24, 2007, 05:02:55 pm »
niiiiceeee!!!  ;)
Thanks man. I have made better, but cause I am the only one that can Swedish here, So is there no need to post them :P

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #3 on: September 25, 2007, 01:44:13 pm »
You know man, sometimes I watch Formula1 and there is 1 racer that I hate. His name is Fernando Alonso and he sucks. I'll be very happy if you think up a "nicely poem" with very """good""" words about that guy.  8)

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« Reply #4 on: September 26, 2007, 04:36:35 pm »
You know man, sometimes I watch Formula1 and there is 1 racer that I hate. His name is Fernando Alonso and he sucks. I'll be very happy if you think up a "nicely poem" with very """good""" words about that guy.  8)

Ok you might think that I am a retard or something but what is Formula1? is that fast kind of racing?

Anyway you want me to be sarcastic or something about him?

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« Reply #5 on: September 26, 2007, 04:43:17 pm »
Fernando Alonso crash his car.
the day after he was drunk .
After a long night in the bar.
Looking for girls but ended up with a runk.

What about that one? Not really kind :P


Fernando Alonso wanted a get laid.
Watched one girl on the dance floor.
He asked if she wanted to be paid.
She showed him the door.

Just a one minute attempt. Will make an haiku or something when I have more time :P

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« Reply #6 on: September 26, 2007, 05:53:28 pm »
NICE! I like them! And I'll post em in other forums kuz they're not copyrighted!

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« Reply #7 on: September 27, 2007, 04:21:55 pm »
NICE! I like them! And I'll post em in other forums kuz they're not copyrighted!

Just mentioned my name, And evrything is fine :P

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« Reply #8 on: September 28, 2007, 08:48:57 am »
ofcourse I'll mentiun it! I'm not stupid or something!

By the way that's Fernando Alonso if u need more information  -------> http://zazz.bg/play:0c11eb2a
And that too --------> http://zazz.bg/play:16e59af5
« Last Edit: September 28, 2007, 09:21:39 am by ninjashark »

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« Reply #9 on: September 28, 2007, 03:05:30 pm »
ofcourse I'll mentiun it! I'm not stupid or something!

By the way that's Fernando Alonso if u need more information  -------> http://zazz.bg/play:0c11eb2a
And that too --------> http://zazz.bg/play:16e59af5


Not cause I understand a damn shit, But anyway.

I made a new one
Fernando Alonso always buy cars in pair
Because his car is always off the way.
Evrytime he crash, he cries in his lair.
And being ther for the rest of the day.




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« Reply #10 on: September 28, 2007, 05:33:07 pm »
The third 1 is good too.
Sorry for that I gived a link to zazz.bg clips. That's a bulgarian clip box. I'm bulgarian too. The next time I'll give a youtube clips :)

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« Reply #11 on: September 28, 2007, 06:06:10 pm »
Sorry for that I gived a link to zazz.bg clips. That's a bulgarian clip box. I'm bulgarian too. The next time I'll give a youtube clips :)

No problems, I can live with that :P

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #12 on: September 29, 2007, 03:49:23 pm »
Poems eh...

FAG


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« Reply #13 on: September 30, 2007, 03:35:01 pm »
Poems eh...

FAG

Hey whats wrong with poetry?

The girls love it :P

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Re: My Poems
« Reply #14 on: September 30, 2007, 04:16:31 pm »
Quote from: Golden Gun
The girls love it :P

Really??? I must learn poetry!

 

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